Very good! Make sure you add some descriptions... We don't know what anyone looks like. We don't know what Mazy or her friends look like, all we can guess is that the "rulers of the school" are blonde, because they are called the "blonde brats". Also, I don't really know where you're going with this story, and it's usually good to put some sort of hint about what the story is going to be about; it keeps readers interested. So basically, just describe characters and settings more, and make sure your plot is developed. Good job! :)
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